08-31-2015, 06:17 PM
So, my notes are terrible. But, I can explain!
Basically I wasn't sure who the "he" was in the line, and the minus is more to do with the lack of clarity than the possible power playing. I wasn't sure if somehow Krieo's head was being raised as Gryffen was rearing or Gryffen was the one being raised up. And then if Gryffen is being raised up, I wasn't sure if it was as Krieos was pulling his head back up? Etc. I just got a little lost here.
So if it was Krieos being raised up, it's power playing, since you obviously can't say what's happening to another horse. But based on your reply, I'm guessing it was Gryffen. So no power playing, and that's fine. But just some more detail, and probably use of names in a battle with two he's to aid in clarity of the attack/counter-attack/etc.
Basically I wasn't sure who the "he" was in the line, and the minus is more to do with the lack of clarity than the possible power playing. I wasn't sure if somehow Krieo's head was being raised as Gryffen was rearing or Gryffen was the one being raised up. And then if Gryffen is being raised up, I wasn't sure if it was as Krieos was pulling his head back up? Etc. I just got a little lost here.
So if it was Krieos being raised up, it's power playing, since you obviously can't say what's happening to another horse. But based on your reply, I'm guessing it was Gryffen. So no power playing, and that's fine. But just some more detail, and probably use of names in a battle with two he's to aid in clarity of the attack/counter-attack/etc.