06-25-2018, 09:11 PM
<b>WINNER: Leilan</b>
<b>Jesper</b>
<b>Attacks & Defenses (-5/+5): +3</b> <i>average of all posts</i>
+, -, or / Were attack(s), defense(s), and movement(s) understandable? (Did the player use directional cues like right and left, was the horse in the right position to make that attack, etc.)
+, -, or / Would the attack(s) have been effective? (If the horse is aiming to cripple their opponent, they wouldn't bite; if they are are trying to distract or bruise they might bite, etc.)
+, -, or / Were the attack(s) and defense(s) described well? (Specific area they are aiming for why they are aiming there, etc.; this does not require specific anatomy but rather, you are aiming for the shoulder to hinder movement, biting to distract or bruise, etc.)
+, -, or / Were the defense(s) reasonable? (Did the horse take an appropriate amount of damage?)
+, -, or / Did the damage taken and previous damage/injuries taken affect the horse’s decisions and movements adequately?
<b>Post 1 (+3)</b> trots up, tries to get parallel facing opposite, bites at elbow, turns to perpendicular and kicks out
+
+
+
/NA
/NA
<b>Post 2 (+3)</b> recoils from frost aura on lips, takes kick to leg and gets frost aura’d, jumps sideways several times to get away from Leilan and his frost aura, tries to get in front of him and kicks out
/Gets just a little confusing at the for the last attack
+
+
+
/Could make more of a point of how injuries affect him/his decisions
<b>Post 3 (+3)</b> lets Leilan’s impact push him across slippery ground, takes kick, then sits down to get out of range of frost aura and grabby teeth
+
/NA
/NA
+
+
<b>Realism (-2/+2): +1.67 </b> <i>(average of the below, max of 2 as not all elements need to be present in all posts, should include at least 2 elements per post, however) </i>
+, - or / Were stats of each character taken into account? (How big is your opponent, do you know their build, experience, traits, etc.)
+, - or / Was the landscape used? (if it's raining, the footing will be muddy and effective movement. if it's winter, the ground might be ice covered, etc. these things can be used in attacks/defenses)
+, - or / Were traits used reasonably and within their limits?
+, - or / Was there anything in particular that stood out in terms of realism, good or bad?
<i>Post 1 (+2) </i>
+Stats mentioned
+Landscape used
/NA
/
<i>Post 2 (+2) </i>
+
/Not mentioned here
/NA
+I really liked some of the descriptions of how he moved or reacted to pain as it was happening
<i>Post 3 (+1)</i>
/
+
/
/
<b>Creativity (-2/+2): +2 </b> <i> (average of the below, max of 2 as not all elements need to be present in all posts, should include at least 2 elements each post, however) </i>
+, - or / Did the horse give a sense of their emotions/reasons/feelings throughout the battle? Do you have a sense of their personality?
+, - or / Were the attacks/defenses creative and interesting?
+, - or / Was there anything in particular that stood out in terms of creativity, good or bad?
<i>Post 1 (+2) </i>
+
+
/
<i>Post 2 (+3) </i>
+
+
+I liked the use of Leilan’s frost aura to slow/stop the bleeding
<i>Post 3 (+2)</i>
+
+
/
<b>Grammar (-3/+3): +3 </b> <i>(total from below 3 elements) </i>
Grammar: (-1/+1): +1
- Were there consistent (i.e. More than two typos in one post, or sentence fragments in every post) grammar issues or typos? If yes, -1. If no, +1
Readability: (-1/+1): +1
- Were the posts easy to understand? If yes, +1. If no, -1
Powerplaying: (-1/+1): +1
- Was there powerplaying? If yes, -1. If no, +1
<i>Outline specific instances of issues for critique; Not a lot off the top of my head, this was good. It can be a little hard to read with extra commas and flowery words; I love those in your regular posts but in challenges where clarity really matters maybe tone it down just a little.</i>
<b>Rubric Total (<i>sum of above sections</i>): +9.67</b>
<b>Leilan</b>
<b>Attacks & Defenses (-5/+5): +4.5</b> <i>average of all posts</i>
+, -, or / Were attack(s), defense(s), and movement(s) understandable? (Did the player use directional cues like right and left, was the horse in the right position to make that attack, etc.)
+, -, or / Would the attack(s) have been effective? (If the horse is aiming to cripple their opponent, they wouldn't bite; if they are are trying to distract or bruise they might bite, etc.)
+, -, or / Were the attack(s) and defense(s) described well? (Specific area they are aiming for why they are aiming there, etc.; this does not require specific anatomy but rather, you are aiming for the shoulder to hinder movement, biting to distract or bruise, etc.)
+, -, or / Were the defense(s) reasonable? (Did the horse take an appropriate amount of damage?)
+, -, or / Did the damage taken and previous damage/injuries taken affect the horse’s decisions and movements adequately?
<b>Post 1 (+5)</b> Rears and uses frost aura, strikes at Jesper, takes kick to shoulder, tries to press into Jesper with ice aura, bites at withers and kicks at his hind leg
+
+
+
+
+
<b>Post 2 (+4)</b> takes slight kick to haunch, and then charges Jesper, bites, and then rears and kicks at his underside
/It’s a little hard to understand where he is all the time
+
+
+
+
<b>Realism (-2/+2): +2 </b> <i>(average of the below, max of 2 as not all elements need to be present in all posts, should include at least 2 elements per post, however) </i>
+, - or / Were stats of each character taken into account? (How big is your opponent, do you know their build, experience, traits, etc.)
+, - or / Was the landscape used? (if it's raining, the footing will be muddy and effective movement. if it's winter, the ground might be ice covered, etc. these things can be used in attacks/defenses)
+, - or / Were traits used reasonably and within their limits?
+, - or / Was there anything in particular that stood out in terms of realism, good or bad?
<i>Post 1 (+3) </i>
+
+
+
/
<i>Post 2 (+2) </i>
+
/
+
/
<b>Creativity (-2/+2): +2 </b> <i> (average of the below, max of 2 as not all elements need to be present in all posts, should include at least 2 elements each post, however) </i>
+, - or / Did the horse give a sense of their emotions/reasons/feelings throughout the battle? Do you have a sense of their personality?
+, - or / Were the attacks/defenses creative and interesting?
+, - or / Was there anything in particular that stood out in terms of creativity, good or bad?
<i>Post 1 (+2) </i>
+
+
/
<i>Post 2 (+2) </i>
+
+
/
<b>Grammar (-3/+3): +3 </b> <i>(total from below 3 elements) </i>
Grammar: (-1/+1): +1
- Were there consistent (i.e. More than two typos in one post, or sentence fragments in every post) grammar issues or typos? If yes, -1. If no, +1
Readability: (-1/+1): +1
- Were the posts easy to understand? If yes, +1. If no, -1
Powerplaying: (-1/+1): +1
- Was there powerplaying? If yes, -1. If no, +1
<i>Outline specific instances of issues for critique; I got nothing off the top of my head. Liked the way you used his frost aura.</i>
<b>Rubric Total (<i>sum of above sections</i>): +11.5</b>
<b>Jesper</b>
<b>Attacks & Defenses (-5/+5): +3</b> <i>average of all posts</i>
+, -, or / Were attack(s), defense(s), and movement(s) understandable? (Did the player use directional cues like right and left, was the horse in the right position to make that attack, etc.)
+, -, or / Would the attack(s) have been effective? (If the horse is aiming to cripple their opponent, they wouldn't bite; if they are are trying to distract or bruise they might bite, etc.)
+, -, or / Were the attack(s) and defense(s) described well? (Specific area they are aiming for why they are aiming there, etc.; this does not require specific anatomy but rather, you are aiming for the shoulder to hinder movement, biting to distract or bruise, etc.)
+, -, or / Were the defense(s) reasonable? (Did the horse take an appropriate amount of damage?)
+, -, or / Did the damage taken and previous damage/injuries taken affect the horse’s decisions and movements adequately?
<b>Post 1 (+3)</b> trots up, tries to get parallel facing opposite, bites at elbow, turns to perpendicular and kicks out
+
+
+
/NA
/NA
<b>Post 2 (+3)</b> recoils from frost aura on lips, takes kick to leg and gets frost aura’d, jumps sideways several times to get away from Leilan and his frost aura, tries to get in front of him and kicks out
/Gets just a little confusing at the for the last attack
+
+
+
/Could make more of a point of how injuries affect him/his decisions
<b>Post 3 (+3)</b> lets Leilan’s impact push him across slippery ground, takes kick, then sits down to get out of range of frost aura and grabby teeth
+
/NA
/NA
+
+
<b>Realism (-2/+2): +1.67 </b> <i>(average of the below, max of 2 as not all elements need to be present in all posts, should include at least 2 elements per post, however) </i>
+, - or / Were stats of each character taken into account? (How big is your opponent, do you know their build, experience, traits, etc.)
+, - or / Was the landscape used? (if it's raining, the footing will be muddy and effective movement. if it's winter, the ground might be ice covered, etc. these things can be used in attacks/defenses)
+, - or / Were traits used reasonably and within their limits?
+, - or / Was there anything in particular that stood out in terms of realism, good or bad?
<i>Post 1 (+2) </i>
+Stats mentioned
+Landscape used
/NA
/
<i>Post 2 (+2) </i>
+
/Not mentioned here
/NA
+I really liked some of the descriptions of how he moved or reacted to pain as it was happening
<i>Post 3 (+1)</i>
/
+
/
/
<b>Creativity (-2/+2): +2 </b> <i> (average of the below, max of 2 as not all elements need to be present in all posts, should include at least 2 elements each post, however) </i>
+, - or / Did the horse give a sense of their emotions/reasons/feelings throughout the battle? Do you have a sense of their personality?
+, - or / Were the attacks/defenses creative and interesting?
+, - or / Was there anything in particular that stood out in terms of creativity, good or bad?
<i>Post 1 (+2) </i>
+
+
/
<i>Post 2 (+3) </i>
+
+
+I liked the use of Leilan’s frost aura to slow/stop the bleeding
<i>Post 3 (+2)</i>
+
+
/
<b>Grammar (-3/+3): +3 </b> <i>(total from below 3 elements) </i>
Grammar: (-1/+1): +1
- Were there consistent (i.e. More than two typos in one post, or sentence fragments in every post) grammar issues or typos? If yes, -1. If no, +1
Readability: (-1/+1): +1
- Were the posts easy to understand? If yes, +1. If no, -1
Powerplaying: (-1/+1): +1
- Was there powerplaying? If yes, -1. If no, +1
<i>Outline specific instances of issues for critique; Not a lot off the top of my head, this was good. It can be a little hard to read with extra commas and flowery words; I love those in your regular posts but in challenges where clarity really matters maybe tone it down just a little.</i>
<b>Rubric Total (<i>sum of above sections</i>): +9.67</b>
<b>Leilan</b>
<b>Attacks & Defenses (-5/+5): +4.5</b> <i>average of all posts</i>
+, -, or / Were attack(s), defense(s), and movement(s) understandable? (Did the player use directional cues like right and left, was the horse in the right position to make that attack, etc.)
+, -, or / Would the attack(s) have been effective? (If the horse is aiming to cripple their opponent, they wouldn't bite; if they are are trying to distract or bruise they might bite, etc.)
+, -, or / Were the attack(s) and defense(s) described well? (Specific area they are aiming for why they are aiming there, etc.; this does not require specific anatomy but rather, you are aiming for the shoulder to hinder movement, biting to distract or bruise, etc.)
+, -, or / Were the defense(s) reasonable? (Did the horse take an appropriate amount of damage?)
+, -, or / Did the damage taken and previous damage/injuries taken affect the horse’s decisions and movements adequately?
<b>Post 1 (+5)</b> Rears and uses frost aura, strikes at Jesper, takes kick to shoulder, tries to press into Jesper with ice aura, bites at withers and kicks at his hind leg
+
+
+
+
+
<b>Post 2 (+4)</b> takes slight kick to haunch, and then charges Jesper, bites, and then rears and kicks at his underside
/It’s a little hard to understand where he is all the time
+
+
+
+
<b>Realism (-2/+2): +2 </b> <i>(average of the below, max of 2 as not all elements need to be present in all posts, should include at least 2 elements per post, however) </i>
+, - or / Were stats of each character taken into account? (How big is your opponent, do you know their build, experience, traits, etc.)
+, - or / Was the landscape used? (if it's raining, the footing will be muddy and effective movement. if it's winter, the ground might be ice covered, etc. these things can be used in attacks/defenses)
+, - or / Were traits used reasonably and within their limits?
+, - or / Was there anything in particular that stood out in terms of realism, good or bad?
<i>Post 1 (+3) </i>
+
+
+
/
<i>Post 2 (+2) </i>
+
/
+
/
<b>Creativity (-2/+2): +2 </b> <i> (average of the below, max of 2 as not all elements need to be present in all posts, should include at least 2 elements each post, however) </i>
+, - or / Did the horse give a sense of their emotions/reasons/feelings throughout the battle? Do you have a sense of their personality?
+, - or / Were the attacks/defenses creative and interesting?
+, - or / Was there anything in particular that stood out in terms of creativity, good or bad?
<i>Post 1 (+2) </i>
+
+
/
<i>Post 2 (+2) </i>
+
+
/
<b>Grammar (-3/+3): +3 </b> <i>(total from below 3 elements) </i>
Grammar: (-1/+1): +1
- Were there consistent (i.e. More than two typos in one post, or sentence fragments in every post) grammar issues or typos? If yes, -1. If no, +1
Readability: (-1/+1): +1
- Were the posts easy to understand? If yes, +1. If no, -1
Powerplaying: (-1/+1): +1
- Was there powerplaying? If yes, -1. If no, +1
<i>Outline specific instances of issues for critique; I got nothing off the top of my head. Liked the way you used his frost aura.</i>
<b>Rubric Total (<i>sum of above sections</i>): +11.5</b>