03-12-2017, 09:57 PM
Uhh I'm on my phone and hate typing on my phone so briefly
- props to you for writing about such a difficult topic, and for doing so in an honest way, there's some really pretty lines in there as well
My only critique is the occurance of events wasn't entirely clear to me as a reader (who is on her phone at bedtime, SO reader error is probable), and I may have mixed the men up (maybe give them initials?)
But really, thanks for sharing, it sucked me in <3
- props to you for writing about such a difficult topic, and for doing so in an honest way, there's some really pretty lines in there as well
My only critique is the occurance of events wasn't entirely clear to me as a reader (who is on her phone at bedtime, SO reader error is probable), and I may have mixed the men up (maybe give them initials?)
But really, thanks for sharing, it sucked me in <3